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 Identify the location does not create value

deep blue sky,UGG boots, white clouds can be elegant; no ocean wide, can be graceful streams; not the tall pine trees, the grass can be charming.

in the colorful life, everyone has their own position, everyone in their own fly high sky and create value. But the value of some small, to create a great value is our pursuit, how to create great value, is not necessary to seek some high ranking people on it? No. Because not all locations are suitable for them, not all locations are suitable for everyone, so you need to find the right position to create the most value.

a tiny screw or the roar of the machine laugh, or cry in the scrap yards, or on the museum has long been proud of the stand. They are in different locations, to play a different role. We have to do a scrap of rusty screws crying,bailey UGG boots, or to pinpoint their location, emitting heat, the highest value? I believe that every aspiring young people will resolutely chose the latter. We want to use their youth, their passion to create their own bright future; with their own efforts, their own sweat casting the future of their own; with their own hard work, irrigation work their own better life!

Olympic champion Liu Xiang is our model. We should be like Liu Xiang, find their own position,UGGs, struggle, struggle, sweat! Realize their value.

Athens Olympics, Liu Xiang, the value has increased, to find him filming ads and image of the spokesperson of the business are numerous, and mostly out of the price. Liu Xiang did not, as some athletes, step into the entertainment business, decided to run in the red on the runway, jumping. He told the media said: character, Liu Xiang on the track to identify the location of his life, to develop their full of talent, achievement of life's brilliant!

The name of Liu Xiang shocked the world, he was in China for the Asian miracle. No, this is not a miracle, the fact is real, Liu found the right location, together with their own efforts, it created a Had he not stay on the track team, but back home continue to study, he would not have today.

believe: life is not a spectator seats, we always find a suitable position, with their endless efforts to create value.

Comment: This article points clear, the language full of literary grace. Composition as the examination room, is very sensitive around in circles, opinion is not clear, this article has demonstrated point of view, different peaks processes, beginning to open the article with the sentence parallelism, neat and implicit sentence, point of view, round co-compact. In addition, Liu Xiang, the use of examples, the article makes sense of the times increased.

experts confirmed the grade and the score: one on the content of the expression 20 + 20 + 20 = 60 points in the development of

[Description]: This article is the candidate of the National Study 2005 essay topic Ⅱ and value

[Appreciation]:

this point clear, graceful language, literarily, well organized, structured, precise and appropriate cases, the full argument, very persuasive and appealing.

subject line with the meaning of problems. Opening sentence of a group of parallelism, although not a The second paragraph of the intention to undertake the subject, turning later to explain the argument. In the fourth, fifth and sixth paragraphs, the Youyi Liu typical examples for the argument further argued, Concluded by reiterating the point of view, take care of the beginning of structural integrity.

course, as a first-aid chapter exam, the individual words is open to question and scrutiny.

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identify the location does not create value

deep blue sky, white clouds can be elegant; no wide sea, can have a stream of Juanxiu: No The tall pine trees, the grass can be charming.

a person, as long as you relentless pursuit, the courage and good looking, you can always find a suitable development and to create value for your location. Location may have high and low, the value may be some small, but as long as you can find your own, is conducive to creating value for your position, then you are a lucky person, you can also say that you are likely to be a winner. Because not all locations are suitable for them, not all locations are suitable for anyone, but needs its own to find the right position to create the most value.

a tiny screw or the roar of the machine laugh, or cry in the scrap yards, or on the museum has long been proud of the stand. They are in a different position, plays a different role. What do you do a cry in the waste sites in the rusty screws, or to find their place, to create their own value? I believe that every aspiring young people will resolutely chose the latter. We want to use their youth, with their enthusiasm to build their own bright tomorrow; want to use their own efforts, with their own labor to cast their own future; want to use their own hard work, with their own sweat to irrigate the good life of their own. Provided, however, you must first find their own position.

Olympic champion Liu Xiang is our model. We should like Liu Xiang, find their own position, struggle, struggle, sweat, and create their own value.

Athens Olympics, Liu Xiang's worth double. Find him filming ads merchants flocked to the spokesperson, and mostly out of the price. Although Liu is also filming a few ads, but he soon realized that his position should be in track and field, the value of his life, can only hurdle before the meters can be fully reflected. So he decided to return to re-run the runway red, jumping up. He told the media said: kinds of character, Liu Xiang on the track to identify the location of his life, develop their talents, the brilliant achievements of his life!

The name of Liu Xiang shocked the world, he was in China for the Asian miracle. No, this is not a miracle, is a real fact. Liu Xiang pinpoint their location, together with their own efforts, it created a Had he not stay on the track team, but back home continue to study,UGG shoes, he would not have today. If Liu Xiang became well-known commercials all day long to indulge in big money, then the value of his life would not be fully reflected.

pinpoint their location bar, you only identify the location of their own development, be possible to create the greatest value.

thinking:

1, on the basis of this paper made the original what changes? Why should this change?

2, in order to highlight the theme, the paper turned a deaf ear increase in the deduction where the theme of words or sentences?